from manilagayguy
"Walang Kawala is going to be premiered at the UP Film Institute on November 6. Tickets at 100 pesos available at the cinema booth on the day just before the showing time (7pm)."
1. The use of "is going to be premiered" is a confusing construction that can be avoided by the use of a future tense. "Walang Kawala will premiere at the UP Film Institute." Easier, right?
2. The second sentence can bemuse and bewilder even the most intelligent mind. Are tickets available on the day itself? Are tickets available the day just before showing time? If it's the former, then it will be wiser to a) simplify the sentence or b) you some punctuation:
a. Tickets at 100 pesos are available at the cinema booth just before showtime.
b. Tickets at 100 pesos are available at the cinema booth on the day itself, just before showtime.
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3 comments:
woah! grammar nazi! :P
i like the concept of your blog. i mean, this is the first that ive seen a free proofreading slash editing blog. :P kudos!
hey thanks hehehe, one of these days, i will DO you *your blog i mean*
available rin ba oto sa market?? saan puedi maka bili??? cge na!!!!
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